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(Magical Miracle) Public Art Dump+Critique Thread

Discussion in 'Art and Drawings' started by InLucidReverie, 20 July 2012.

  1. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    Okay, so the idea of this thread is that everypony posts a drawing that
    they want proper critique on and others critique it.
    Simple.
    Rules:
    -One Piece at a time.
    No Posting several pieces in one post.
    -Critique to post.
    Must crit at least one piece to post your own.
    -Be Constructive.
    By all means, point out that mistake, but say how it might be fixed/helped.
    -Have a thick skin.
    Don't take critique personally, this thread is not for stroking your ego.
    -Don't spam the same drawing.
    Only post major updates, don't keep posting minor edits.
    So there you go, post away!
    (I don't actually have anything I want to improve at the minute)
     
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  2. Ryuji1993

    Ryuji1993 Insane pony artist/writer

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    I guess I'll start with this. Don't comment about lack of colour though because some of the colours I need have run out and I'll be releasing a full colour version when I manage to scrap together the money for the promarkers (Expensive little buggers) Spoiler tag due to size.
    [​IMG]
     
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  3. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    I'm going to suggest you look into techniques for drawing hair. The way you draw it is very solid and simple and doesn't really follow the flow that hair actually has.

    Here's an example based on your piece:
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    That's only the simplest of demonstrations and most probably you'd want to adapt it very differently for each pony... but hopefully this demonstrates that the best hair is drawn when you think about how it actually attaches to the head and how it flows from that point.

    If you look at the best pieces around, most will have this same basis in some form.
     
  4. Ryuji1993

    Ryuji1993 Insane pony artist/writer

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    I'll be looking into some techniques. I'll even redraw the piece and put up a comparison to see how much better it is. Thanks for the tip.
     
  5. ThunderFlumps

    ThunderFlumps I'm just too sugoi

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    Appreciate what you are doing on this thread, it's a good idea.

    [edit] oops broke rule already XD sorry!.
    I'd say try making your lines more softer when you work, and i always find that being quick with your hand when doing hair/mane works best for getting that defined edge you want.




    here's mine.

    [​IMG]

    It is a unfinished piece just in case you were wondering if i just left it like that.
     
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  6. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    Okay, I can see straight away that you're drawing your construction lines oddly. The face should sit higher than that on the shape. The eyes should be more or less central, vertically. I made them a little lower here to make him look young, but hopefully it should show:

    eqrg213erh.png

    Other than the oversized forehead, it's generally a very nice piece. Look forward to seeing the final piece sometime.
     
  7. ThunderFlumps

    ThunderFlumps I'm just too sugoi

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    Thanks for your critique and i'll take it to heart. I guess i do oversize my foreheads sometimes, but that has just come naturally with always drawing massive hair! But yeh thanks for what you did ad i like how you re-draw stuff that's pretty sweet.
     
  8. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    When you draw massive hair, you should be sure that it fits on a normal size head =p
     
  9. Ryuji1993

    Ryuji1993 Insane pony artist/writer

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    With that you might want to draw the head and face first, I read that while looking up multiple techniques earlier today. Might help you a little.

    Okay, worked on the hair a little with the advice I was given. What do you think? (Sorry about quality but I don't have access to a scanner until Sunday)
    [​IMG]
     
  10. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    That's a bit better, but try not to bunch it up quite so much. It kind of looks like it's full of wax there.

    Also, I should say that pony manes actually grow from the entire length of the neck, not like human hair.
     
  11. ThunderFlumps

    ThunderFlumps I'm just too sugoi

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    I always do that XD. it's like ritual.
     
  12. Firenze

    Firenze Blarg

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    [​IMG]

    I need some crit on this, as its primarily the lighting I am worried about, as I have a commission soon that inolves alot of lighting....
     
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  13. InLucidReverie

    InLucidReverie Cupcake?

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    Thread rules, Firenze. Read them please.
     
  14. Firenze

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    *is dumb*

    Right, as Im here, might as well crit the rest:

    Ryugi: You have the hair alot better now, I would definately say keep it like that. The areas I think need some work are the muzzle shapes primarily. The stallion's muzzle seems too curved, and slightly too long, like his nostrils would poke out too far from the mouth area. have a look at the redline that Lucid did earlier, the muzzle is almost a box shape.

    TFlumps: Not much I can expand on other than the large forhead and from what Lucid has already pointed out. I do like the design of him!
     
  15. Ryuji1993

    Ryuji1993 Insane pony artist/writer

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    The piece itself is great but as a little tip I'd say look up some techniques or when it's in line mode put a circle for a lightsource and draw multiple lines coming from it to get the points to light to the full potential.
     
  16. InLucidReverie

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    Untitled-1.png
    Now, I really do have to ask, before I redline this.... is this female Twi with a flat chest or a male Twi?
     
  17. Firenze

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    Female, but the armour will make her look alot more masculine. It is full combat armour.
     
  18. InLucidReverie

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    A|ctually, you know what; not gonna post my overline of the body, because I changed way too much of it and it explains nothing.

    You need to think about how clothes fall on the body though. I would like to see your construction lines, if you still have them!

    What I will do is post the head though, to demonstrate one thing:

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    Notice how i worked out the positions for the horn and ears? In your drawing they're in entirely odd places. That's something you have to think about.
     
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  19. KillerDerpy

    KillerDerpy New Pony

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    umm hi im new i want to know if this is good for a begginer [​IMG]

    what program would i use if i program so i could read up on it?
     
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    Please check the rules that are in place for this thread
     

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